Raw Place On Tongue Feedback On Poem About Human Trafficking Please?

Feedback on poem about human trafficking please? - raw place on tongue

Follow me on the street
Moon and stars. Naked white. A touch.
A bundle of straw against his party,
A straw to the back broken
In light of the stars in the cave entrance.

Please tell me secrets. The language in the ear.
Bifurcation of the different sectors.
Rogue dust falls on old ideas.
Twinkle. As the pieces of diamonds,
Skin smears and weeps.

Mild steel rusts, where he sits,
his cousin, the red tongue.
. Swallow Enjoy. And smile.
A grimace of bitterness in its place.
No moon as our moon.